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FanFiction - When you play with fire, you get burned.
February 28, 2010
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Sweet chapter I like how you used "not afraid of a little action are you?" oh and it was awesome that Kate won and now castle has to watch pretty woman lol.

February 28, 2010
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HAHA WOW! LOVED IT! The pretty people thing was a nice touch! Can't wait for the next part! and WOOHOO!! GO BECKETT!!

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February 28, 2010
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Nice continuation! As usual, you have a really great way with the dialogue. I like the "Men should never marry their muse…" and "No number of custom ordered bullet proof ‘WRITER’ vests…" and "I have many pretty women…" and "This game reminds me of mousetrap…" comments especially.

You also really nicely created interactions among Alexis, Martha, Castle, and Beckett, and the teasing among them flowed great too.

I had the same thought as Nalissa initially about Beckett's movie choice, but it fit nicely into the story.

Looking forward to the next part!

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March 2, 2010
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Chapter six is finally done! There's not as much conversation because there wasn't a whole lot to say. I decided to take a little turn from the banter but I promise it will be back for the next chapter! Ryan and Esposito will be in it, with small parts from Lanie and Montgomery. Enjoy and please review! smile

It might be a few days until chapter seven is done. With the ending of this installment, I want to get the tone and banter just right for the next chapter. It has more characters in it so it's a little more difficult to write. I'm studying for tests (again) and sadly University takes precedence over this. I'll try to finish ASAP, but it might be a while. So I apologize in advance. And while you're waiting for the next chapter, can the hard core Castle fans spot the quote from Nikki Heat?

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Chapter six: It takes two.

Kate stood there looking from Castle to the empty seat, to the blanket he was already under, and then back to Castle. She walked towards the couch, lifted the blanket and got comfortable.

"This is my side, and this is your side. Stay on your side!" She glared at him indicating he had better not try any funny business.

"Relax Beckett, I don't bite. Well, unless –"

"Castle!" She hit him.

"Ouch! Fine, I'll be good."

"Good." She said, and that was Castle's cue to hit play.

Twenty-five minutes into the movie, Kate was rather enjoying the movie and pleasantly surprised that Castle had not tried to move over, steal the blanket or try any other tricks. Castle however, was not paying any attention to the movie whatsoever. He was running numerous scenarios though his head as to how to move closer to Kate. He didn't want to do anything rash which would cause her to leave. But he couldn't just sit next to her on a couch, under a blanket and keep to himself. After another ten minutes of having a conversation with himself, trying to predict what Kate would do, he had decided on a plan of action.

He stood up and paused the movie. "I'm going to get a glass of water, do you want anything?"

"No, I'm good thanks."

"Alright. And what about you mother?"

"Wine please."

"Besides that."

"Well then no." She mumbled under her breath and shifted on the couch.

Castle walked to the kitchen and poured himself some water. The whole time he thought that Kate would surely kill him. He was so nervous that when he started heading back towards the couch he almost dropped his glass. As he got closer, he was giving himself a pep talk: Okay mister awesomesauce mystery writer, this is it, it's now or never. You've faced down mobsters and you survived. You've been held at gun point and you survived. She's only a girl – no wait, scratch that, a woman. At times, a very, very scary woman. A woman who saved me from mobsters and being shot at gun point. Who's going to back me up when she points a gun in my face? Mother won't do anything and Alexis is asleep. What if she kills me right then and there? Stop it! Focus Rick, focus! He gained his composure, peeled back the blanket and sat down. Instead of being right against the arm of the couch he was now in the middle of 'his side' – approximately five inches away from Kate.

He thought to himself: Okay, just act natural. He waited for a few seconds for Kate's reaction.

There was nothing. He looked over at her, but her response was not what he expected. "Well, are you going to press play or just sip on your water?"

He relaxed and realized he was in the clear. He picked up the remote and followed her instructions.

They were almost half way through the movie when Martha had starting to lightly snore. Since she was now out for the night and Alexis was asleep long ago, he knew this was his chance. Thinking there was no way she would shoot him in front of his mother and with Alexis upstairs, he slowly lifted his left arm and rested his hand on her thigh.

He thought he would surly be dead. At that moment his life flashed before his eyes. He saw his first day of school, Meredith, Alexis' birth, Gina, his first book signing, his first book release party, Alexis' first day of school, her going to prom, and finally the day when Kate whispered 'you have no idea' in his ear.

He sat frozen. He didn't know if he should look at Kate, or remove his hand in fear of losing it. So he did nothing, except focused on his breathing. A few seconds had past and he didn't feel any throbbing on his body so Kate hadn't injured him. Another thirty seconds had past his limbs were still attached to his body, and he didn't feel a gun shot wound. He felt he was in the clear so he finally focused his attention to the movie.

The moment Castle's hand touched her thigh Kate's first reaction was to rip his whole arm from his body, and hit him with it. She knew everything was a ploy to get him to his apartment and she fell for it. It took her a minute to decide what she should do. If she didn't do anything she would be silently telling him that she wanted to further their relationship, when she didn't want to. She moved her hand beneath the blanket and rested it on his.

Castle thought he was surly going to pass out. He started to have another conversation in his head: Wait, what? She's resting her hand on mine. Does that mean she likes me? Like really likes me? Focus Rick, focus! Just breathe. I'm still not dead; she's actually holding my hand – sort of. Wait, what's she doing now? She's lifting my hand and…oh. Wait! No! Stop! That's not the plan!

He was screaming in his head as she took his hand and placed it on his own lap. He knew he had crossed a line. They both sat in silence for the remainder of the movie, with the exception of Martha's snoring a few feet from them.

When the movie was finished, both Kate and Castle were silent. Kate didn't know the best way to handle the situation and Castle was afraid of making it any worse. So, Castle did what he does best – me made a joke.

"You must hate it that you couldn't win the game, hey?"

"What are you talking about? I beat you!" She was relieved he was the first to speak.

"Yeah, but you didn't win the entire game. You and Alexis called it a tie, remember?"

"We can always have a rematch."

"We can, but since you didn't actually win I can still call you Katie, and make inappropriate jokes."

"But since you never actually won either, I don't have to go on a date with you. I think I win."

"Ouch!" He clutched his chest mimicking being shot in the heart and she laughed. "There's always tomorrow, or the next family night. I'm sure Alexis and mother wouldn't have any objections."

"Thanks, but I think I've had enough fun for one night. It's getting late, I should go."

His heart sank, but she did say she had fun. "So, you had fun? See, I told you you'd enjoy it."

She sighed. "I guess you were right, but it's really late."

"Alright I'll call my driver. He probably just went out for coffee so it shouldn't be too long."

"Okay, thanks."

"In the meantime, I think I've got a lime, salt, and something fun in a bottle. We could do a little Nikki Heat re-enactment."

Kate grabbed her coat and walked towards the door. "I think I'll pass. I'm going down to wait in the lobby. Night"

"Wait, Beckett!" She turned around to see him rake a hand through his hair and rub his forehead. He looked like he wanted to say something.

"I… I'm sorry." He was sincere.

"For what?"

Castle just raised his arm and wiggled his fingers.

"Oh… that." She looked away, afraid to make eye contact.

"Yeah, that." For once he looked uncomfortable.

"We work together okay. I don't want any distractions."

Hearing Kate say he was a distraction hurt him more then getting shot ever could, and it showed on his face.

"I didn't mean it that way. It's just that…" She trailed off. She was looking for the right words.

"I get it. It's fine." The words implied he was fine, but his facial expression told a different story.

He figured he'd try one more time. "But… why can't we give it a try? I mean, you've already met my family and they love you. We spend a lot of time together. We're yin and yang – we need each other."

Kate was speechless. She didn't want to say anything that would hurt him, but she couldn't agree. "Castle,

I'm sorry… I can't… I just –"

Before she knew what was happening she felt Castle's lips against her own. He tried for sweet and tender, but when she put her hands in his hair, he lost control. Pushing himself foreword, Kate was now between Castle and the door behind her.

She couldn't believe she was kissing Richard Castle. She knew it was wrong but it felt so right. Her head told her to stop, but her heart and body said the complete opposite. Kate Beckett was a cop, and she always listened to her brain – so, naturally, she pulled back. At that moment he put his hands around her waist trying to pull her closer. But she pushed him away.

"I have to go."

"But – "

"Sorry Castle, I have to go." She turned, opened the door and left his apartment.

"My driver isn't here, how are you going to get home?"

"I'll get a cab." She hollered making her way down the elevator. He wasn't sure if he sensed anger, hurt or regret in her voice. Castle was left in the doorway trying to think of how we could possibly fix this.

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Lanie was almost asleep when she heard her phone ring.

"Hello?"

"Hi Lanie."

"Kate, it's late. What's wrong?"

"We kissed."

"Who kissed?"

Kate was silent, but Lanie put it together. "Writer boy? You kissed Castle!? What? When? Details!"

"When I left his apartment. I'm home now. And I didn't kiss him… we just kissed."

"It takes two, Kate."

Kate was silent.

"And?"

"And what? We kissed that's all." Kate was defensive.

"If that's all then why are you calling me?" Kate didn't answer. "So, how was it?"

"It was…" she paused, "fine." She knew if her best friend had been there, she would be reaching for more than just a glass of water. "I don't know what to do. We work together." Desperation was in her voice.

"Well, how'd you leave it?"

"I left." Kate realized how bad that sounded. "I just left. His mother was asleep on the couch and Alexis was upstairs. I didn't know what to do."

Lanie thought for a moment. It was obvious that her best friend was hurt and confused. "You need to talk to him and sort it out. Maybe he'll back off."

"It's Castle."

"All I know is that you need to sort it out with him. You won't find the answers you need talking to me. Just tell him you don't want a romantic relationship now, or something."

"I know, I just…" She trailed off. "Thanks for the talk."

"No problem. And Kate?"

"Yeah?"

"Just so you know, I am the ME, remember – I have the power to say that he died of natural causes."

Kate laughed. "I’ll keep that in mind, thanks again."

"Night."

"Night."

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I wasn't sure if I was going to take the traditional route of Kate and Castle kissing, but I decided to after. I wasn't really sure if people reading wanted it, or would rather the banter that we love so much. I'm not sure if in the end they'll be together or not. Opinions please!? I want this story to be different from some of the ones I've already read, so I'm not sure how I'm going to end it. There's definitely another chapter and either one or two after that (depending on what I decide to do). Any ideas? Feedback is appreciated! smile

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March 3, 2010
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Omg they kissed yay but I hope things don't become weird between them.

March 3, 2010
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I like it so far! I especially like how you made Beckett strong (like we know she is on the show) and that she didnt stay for that first kiss, I like how they didn't uh hummm….the way some people write it…. I think they should end up together in the end or maybe at least have it so that they dont, but there is a GOOD chance they will…thats my opinion…in reality i think that kate would pull back and leave, it suits her, i like how you didnt make her give in…thats the beckett we know and love! Cant wait to see what you write nextwink

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March 3, 2010
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Nice chapter. Looking forward to see what happens next. Cool

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March 3, 2010
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It's looking great! Update soon! wink

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March 5, 2010
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Chapter seven: It was nice knowin' ya

Since murderers decided to take Sunday off, it was Monday morning and Castle had still not spoken to Kate. Numerous times he had dialled her number but didn't press send. He had sent her countless texts but she hadn't responded. He thought of going into the precinct, since he knew she would be there doing paperwork, but he didn't want to push to hard. He thought she might actually be in danger, but if that were true somebody from the station would have contacted him already. He knew she needed time so that's what he gave her.

Castle was in his office trying to write when his cell rang. He sprinted to the phone that he had left in the kitchen. His heart dropped when Esposito's name flashed before him. Esposito never called, it was always Kate.

"Esposito. What is it? Is Beckett okay?"

"Well, aren't you just a ray of sunshine in the morning? What's up with you? Beckett's fine." He was confused.

"Sorry. It's just that… never mind. Why are you calling me?"

"We got ourselves a body. Beckett said she phoned you but you didn't answer…?"

Castle knew that Kate hadn't called him. He'd had his phone attached to him for the past 24 hours, and this meant she was angry. "Oh yeah, sorry about that. I … I left my phone on silent by accident."

"No prob bro, do you want a squad car to pick you up."

He thought about making up some excuse as to why he couldn't go. He knew that Kate would be there and it was obvious she didn't want to see him. But it wasn't like Castle to not show up a crime scene. He knew if he didn't go the boys would know something was up. The last think he wanted was for everyone to know what he did; Kate would definitely kill him then. "Yeah sure. Thanks."

"Okay. See you in a few."

With that he hung up, grabbed his coat and made his way to the door. He wasn't sure what he would do, or say when he got there, but he knew he couldn't just sit by and not try to fix it.

When Castle arrived on the scene CSU were already busy at work and Ryan and Esposito were interviewing what he assumed to be a family member. Kate was nowhere to be found. Castle looked over at the body and the look he received from Lanie told him that Kate had already told her about Saturday night. He knew he had his work cut out for him.

Just then Ryan walked over. "That was the neighbour. She's a real piece of work. Says she was at work when our vic was killed, even though we don't even know time of death yet. When I pointed that fun little fact out, she said she sensed I would say that. Apparently she thinks she's psychic."

"Have fun with that one." He said jokingly. "Where's Beckett?"

"In the living room, that way." He pointed his finger to the back of the house.

Castle walked in the direction Ryan pointed to, and found Kate sitting across from a middle aged woman.

Kate was already scribbling notes in her notepad. "When did you last see your daughter?"

In between tears the lady was able to put together sentences. "Yesterday. Said she was going to her friend's house… Rachel Wilson. They were going clubbing. I went out to a movie with my girlfriends and when I got home I found…" She trailed off and began to cry uncontrollably.

"Did your daughter have any enemies?"

"Not that I know of. Rachel might be able to tell you more."

"Okay. Thank-you. I promise you, we'll find out what happened to your daughter."

The woman continued to weep as Kate began to walk out of the room. She turned and seen Castle standing in the doorway.

He figured he might as well just jump in. "I texted you, you didn't answer." She stood there just looking at him. "Can you at least talk to me?" She brushed past him and started walking down the hall.

"You lied to Esposito. You never called me this morning. I checked my phone." There was a hint of anger in his voice. If she heard it she ignored it.

"You kissed me back." His voice was firm and it got her attention. She halted, turned around and walked toward him.

"Just drop it."

"No, I'm not going to drop it. You kissed me back."

"Listen Castle, I'm at work. I don't have time to play these games with you."

"This isn't a game to me, Kate."

She was taken-a-back. He never called her Kate before; it was always Beckett, Detective and most recently Katie. "I'm working. Now is not the time to discuss this. So, just drop it!" This time it was Kate who spoke with anger. She turned around and proceeded to walk down the hallway, again. He wanted to stop her and tell her how he felt but it was no use. He obeyed her wishes and kept to himself. About an hour after, Esposito announced that they had what they needed here, and headed to the precinct.

The car ride back to the precinct was, to say the least, very awkward. Twenty minutes of complete and utter silence. Castle didn't ask if he could play with the siren or ask inappropriate questions that usually made Kate roll her eyes. He didn't try to apologize because he didn't know when the best time to bring it up was, without Kate yelling at him again.

When they got up to the precinct Castle went to the break room for some coffee and Kate sat at her desk. They had still not spoken a word since Kate yelled at him in the hallway.

Ryan and Esposito shared a look that they knew something was up. At the crime scene there were no witty remarks from Castle. Beckett didn't threaten him, not even once. Castle didn't bounce theories around which usually annoyed Kate.

"You think it's the morning after for the two of them?" Esposito piped up. The emphasis on 'morning after' caused Ryan to burst out laughing.

"Really?

Common, there is no way in hell that they slept together last night. If they did, Castle would be one of two things. One, he'd either be overjoyed and jumping around, or two, he'd be dead because Beckett killed him. He wouldn't be moping around here like a lost puppy."

"I dunno' bro; she has been different since he's been shadowing her."

Ryan just gave him a no-way-in-hell look.

"Thirty bucks says they slept together last night."

Ryan thought about it. It's true, their boss had changed since Castle's been working on cases with them. But there was still no way. "You're on!" He said, just as Montgomery came up to them. "Find out what's up with those two. We can't afford to have unsolved cases because something has got their panties in a bunch."

"Yes sir." The boys said in unison and Montgomery returned to his office.

Ryan and Esposito made their way to Castle. He was sitting down drinking his coffee, going over every detail of last night in his head. Trying to figure out what he had done wrong. He knew he shouldn't have put his hand on her, but he had to try something. He thought that maybe it was because he was that he was a bad kisser. However, after thinking about it more he came to the logical conclusion that possibly couldn't be the reason. Maybe he had been too forceful, moved to fast. He knew she was hurt and maybe he pushed her, trapped her, and caught her off guard. He knew that Kate Beckett was not a woman who liked to be caught off guard. He wanted something that Kate obviously wasn't ready for. He wanted to fix it but didn't know how.

"Hey." Ryan decided to break the ice. Castle just kept starring at his coffee mug.

"Tell us your troubles my good man." Esposito said. Still nothing from the guy who usually had some wiseass reply to verything. "Snap out of Castle!" Castle's head jerked up and found the two boys staring down at him.

"Oh, sorry." he muttered. Looking at them for just a second before he returned fixated on the mug.

Esposito, eager to get his thirty bucks started in on Castle. "Its obvious there's something bothering you. Now normally I'm not the type to talk about feeling or anything, but what's up with you this morning?" He looked at Castle waiting for some kind of indication he was listening.

Castle didn't reply.

Esposito continued. "The captain said that he needs you and Beckett to pull it together. I'd rather ask you then her – you won't shoot me."

Ryan who noticed the forceful tone shot Esposito a glare telling him he was onto his little game.

Just as he was about to ask Castle something else, Kate walked into the room. She made eye contact with her two detectives but not even glancing at the lump of a man hunched over in the chair. She grabbed a mug and walked toward the espresso machine.

Esposito figured the best way to collect his winnings was to corner them, when they couldn't escape. "So, did you two sleep together last night or what?"

At the moment Ryan's mouth dropped open as he looked at his partner trying to figure out if he had heard him correctly.

Esposito just shrugged. "Well someone had to say something."

No faster then the words had left his mouth Kate dropped the mug, shattering it. "Esposito I swear to God I will you shoot you if you do not get out of my way!" Even though her tone was harsh he did not budge.

"It was nice knowin' ya." Ryan whispered to his partner.

"Listen," Esposito said "everyone can tell that something happened between you two of you sometime between the time we wrapped up the Smith case Saturday afternoon and when Castle arrived at the crime scene this morning. Montgomery said that you need to work this out. So take a personal day or something, just figure it out."

Kate cursed under her breath, walked out of the break room and returned to her desk.

Esposito looked at Ryan. "Well, she didn't deny it. Pay up." He held his hand, expecting his money.

"Yes, but she didn't say they did, either." Ryan shot back.

For the first time this leaving the crime scene, Castle spoke. "Save your money boys, nothing happened."

Esposito reached into his wallet and gave Ryan his cash. Ryan collected his winnings and they watched as Castle left the break room and headed for the elevator. He figured that he wouldn't be able to talk to Kate anywhere at work, and it was obvious she didn't want him around. He decided to go home and think about how he would fix the mistake he had ade.

 

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I hope you've enjoyed the story so far. But, I need your help. I have a bits and pieces already started for chapter eight but I seem to be having writers block. The ending isn't coming as easy as the previous chapters. I need some ideas! I don't want anything drastic like one of them gets shot. So, if you have any storylines that you like, please review or send me a PM. If I use your idea in anyway I will definitely credit you. Thanks in advance! smile

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March 5, 2010
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Nice chapter. I love the interactions of the gang.

Sorry though, I have no idea where it should go.. but it is Friday and my mind is mush. Crazy2

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March 5, 2010
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WOW! I LOVE THIS CHAPTER!

"So, did you two sleep together last
night or what?"

Hahaha love it! Im glad it was esposito who said that, dont see ryan sayin it (he cud but, more likely esposito)

Well, there are many ways you could go from here…I say you get Lanie to interfere a bit more, knock a little sense into Beckett's head! And you don't neccessarily have to end it with them 'together'…as long as they make-up it'll be good. On Castle's side I'd say you get Alexis to do something…maybe Alexis talks to Beckett…could be interesting..

 

I'd really like to see more scenes of Beckett and Alexis talking or whatever in the show…

 

Keep up the good work!

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March 5, 2010
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SinginPrincess said:

WOW! I LOVE THIS CHAPTER!

"So, did you two sleep together last

night or what?"

Hahaha love it! Im glad it was esposito who said that, dont see ryan sayin it (he cud but, more likely esposito)

Well, there are many ways you could go from here…I say you get Lanie to interfere a bit more, knock a little sense into Beckett's head! And you don't neccessarily have to end it with them 'together'…as long as they make-up it'll be good. On Castle's side I'd say you get Alexis to do something…maybe Alexis talks to Beckett…could be interesting..

 

I'd really like to see more scenes of Beckett and Alexis talking or whatever in the show…

 

Keep up the good work!


 

Thanks for your ideas, I'll definitely keep them in mind! smile

 

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ShutTheFrontDoor. said:

SinginPrincess said:

WOW! I LOVE THIS CHAPTER!

"So, did you two sleep together last

night or what?"

Hahaha love it! Im glad it was esposito who said that, dont see ryan sayin it (he cud but, more likely esposito)

Well, there are many ways you could go from here…I say you get Lanie to interfere a bit more, knock a little sense into Beckett's head! And you don't neccessarily have to end it with them 'together'…as long as they make-up it'll be good. On Castle's side I'd say you get Alexis to do something…maybe Alexis talks to Beckett…could be interesting..

 

I'd really like to see more scenes of Beckett and Alexis talking or whatever in the show…

 

Keep up the good work!


 

Thanks for your ideas, I'll definitely keep them in mind! smile

 


 

You are very welcome! I can hardly wait to see what you write next!

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March 7, 2010
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OK, ShutTheFrontDoor, I've just read the whole story and I've gotta say that for someone who says he/she doesn't have a lot of experien ce writing, that is quite a good story.  The dialogue is great, which is always what I have trouble with.  And I love Esposito's "So did you guys sleep together or wwhat?" 

As for suggestions on where to take the story, I can't think of anything.  Just mull it over some and see what inspiration comes to you.  That's what happened to me and my fanfic The Funeral was the result.  The first couple chapters came to me right away and the rest came much slower, but the more I wrote, the more came out.  I just worked it out as I went along. 

But even if you never finish it, it's great so far. 

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March 7, 2010
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Good chapter poor Beckett the guys betting over her and castle :(

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